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Some people support the development of factory farming and the scientific creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but both the view and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
It is seen that intensive production of
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- products
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almost every
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. People have varied in their opinion. While advocates of industrial farming point out that
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 is essential to meet the increasing demand
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 food items on a larger scale, others consider
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 can have huge
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repercussions
 on human and nature.
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On the one hand, supporters of intensive production argue that
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 initiative is to satisfy the hunger of the common people.
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, by following traditional methods of agricultural
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techniques
 , may not be able to cultivate as required. Being engineered seeds, the eatables become
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tastier and healthier, along with more size and number.
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, genetically modified mangos are well known for
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 flavour and colour, which are highly demanded globally. Without
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 farming method, many people would have ended in poverty.
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, the opponents of the above- mentioned view, opponents think that
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 would cause many health problems to man due to the genetic modifications.
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these plants may not have the immunity to resist various diseases;
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, it is common to use
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xcessive amount of pesticides and fertilizers. These chemicals can result
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some health issues,
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,
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 as cancer, skin irritation and breathing difficulties. Apart from
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, which can pollute our environment in many ways, namely, air, water,and soil.
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,
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 group is strongly fighting to cease
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 agriculture practice.
Conclusion
In conclusion, even though some agree
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 production strategy, others say that it is aginst of the natural balance.
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, by considering all these, I strongly think that though there are negatives
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an be found
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 method, the benefits are paramount.

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