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In the future we may have to live on other planets. For this reason, some people think it is necessary to spend money on research about space. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the opinion that it is important to invest in
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 about
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 as there may be a scenario that we may need to live on other planets.
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 about
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. Discovery of water on Mars along with the
research
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 data from other planets is indicative that they may be able to support
life
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 and all
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 activities need a lot of funding. Astronomical data from Mars proves it has water.
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 has led scientists to believe that there may be a possibility that
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 either existed on that planet or the planet may be
favorable
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 to supporting human
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 of
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 is being done on
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 subject with different countries sending their
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 shuttles to see who is able to discover
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first
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. Apart from Mars, several other planets are being researched for traces of
life
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 or the faintest possible scenario that may be able to support
life
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. All
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research
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 on
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 obviously is very expensive as it involves a lot of equipment, fuel , machinery and not to forget, experienced astronauts and researchers. More often than not, it involves a lot of experiments and test runs which
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 consumes time and needs finances. In conclusion, keeping in mind that there may be a time in future where we may need to live on other planets, I definitely agree that we need to spend money on
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 about
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. We have evidence that there may be
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 on other planets and all
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 needs money.
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