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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words

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Unequivocally, in the contemporary era, people are more inclined to taste continental foods and worldwide cuisines.
However
, I opine that consumers should buy local
food
 which has more advantages than demerits. In the following passages, I will fortify my opinion my plethora of arguments.
To begin
 with, the foremost benefit of consuming local
food
 products is to the economy of the country. The sale of the nationally produced goods contributes to the income of the nation as a whole.
Thus
, it is profitable for the growth and development of the country. In the recent news article, it has been surveyed that in Japan, people prefer to eat only nation made
food
 and
hence
, the per capita income is highest as compared to
another
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 countries.
Moreover
,
the
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another undeniable merit of purchasing local
food
 is that it is free from import taxes and are more reliable. The imported products are comparatively expensive and sometimes the quality of
food
 from abroad is compromised in lieu of gaining maximum profits.
For instance
,
last
 month, I ordered Singapore almonds online and to my surprise the some of the almonds were bitter in taste and were the way more expensive
that
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 local almonds.
Nevertheless
, the proponents of shipped foods have their own apprehensions that export and import of foods boost economic harmony among nations. They
also
 believe that people should have
o
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pportunity to enjoy different kinds of
food
 and change in taste is imperative for humans. To conclude, I reiterate that the merits of having local
food
 overshadow its disadvantages.
Although
, people should occasionally have international
food
but
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local
food
 should be their main meal. The onus of the development of any country lies
on
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 the individuals of that nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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