The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problems does this create? What can be done to tackle this.

There is no doubt that economic imbalance has been widened for many years.
This
can be seen not only in developing countries
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but developed nations as well. Poor living standard and
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ncreasing number of crimes are resulted by
this
.
However
,
this
situation can be significantly controlled by developing an effective
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system in the country. One of the main social issues of economic imbalance of a society is that lack of basic facilities among economically deprived sections.
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, they may not have
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ufficient amount of food, clean water and sanitation facilities. Whereas the rich,
on the other hand
, could enjoy luxuries lifestyle with advanced infrastructures and vehicles.
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, in Mumbai, where anyone can see the imbalance, if one area is completely dedicated to wealthy families, on the opposite side,definitely, a slum can be irrupted. Slums, on which people hardly find decent jobs to meet their life both end. Eventually, they involve some illegal activities to acquire
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ufficient amount to live happily.
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,
this
issue can improve by implementing
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ffective tax system. For
this
, the government ought to make a plan of action to collect and how to distribute
this
fund equally in order to upgrade the
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life into the
next
level. Another point here is to consider is that creating more employment opportunities in the country to counteract unemployment problems. By doing
this
, the poor would avoid
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in unwanted activities.
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,
this
has been found in a study that drug
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and
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are widely seen among unemployed youth, rather than, employed ones. In conclusion, the gulf between the higher and lower class is widening in our society.Due to
this
, crimes and poor standard of life are seen, but by taxing the rich, the problem can be eliminated in a certain extend.
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