Some people think that watching sport is waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

There are individuals who feel that viewing channels featuring sports are redundant. The community spirit that encompasses
such
events builds a sense of belonging and encourages
sportmanship
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sportsmanship

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and I feel that there are several benefits to dedicating a certain portion of our time to these shows.
Firstly
, there are several followings of clubs and it builds a community around it. People feel a part of those teams and
therefore
look forward to
such
events as a family or group. The excitement and emotions
invovled
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is
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are

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shared amongst the younger and old generation.
For example
, a football club
that is
being telecast would bring a group of people together and we often see bars and homes
orgainising
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gatherings.
Secondly
, fans are often

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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