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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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There is no iota of doubt that, in modern-day society, migration to cities has become the burning question of the day. The changing mindset of
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outh, more and more individuals are leaving the homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities.
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, sometimes it opens Pandora's box. The following paragraphs would evaluate the merits and demerits of the same. Going with the
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 school of thought, it is irrefutable to say that modernization in cities has introduced way many new job opportunities for individuals, with the establishment of multinational companies, more and more people are migrating to the cities for better jobs. As these companies provide better vicinity of work with better health policies, these acts as a magnet for the individuals. A recent study has shown an increment of almost 40% in-migration rate in
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, everybody wants to pursue greener pasture. So it has become a mass mentality of people to migrate to cities for better work opportunities.
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,the youth in rural areas doesn't want to do rural occupations, as in the era of internet, the youth mentality tends to be more westernized. On the flip side,there are some drawbacks associated as people tend to depart from their culture and ethics of their hometown.
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 leave affection with their families and loved ones due to the lack of time. In the conclusion, indeed many pros about lifestyle, availability of services and opportunities, yet there were
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 some cons of moral ethics and affections towards the family. In the end, I opine that persuing a greener pasture is everyone's desire in life, but one should
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 consider saving their ethics and culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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