In some cities people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is replacing cars. Why is this the case? Which development do you think is better?
Every city has they need
they
own value. The city is made from people live into Change the pronoun
their
thier
. Today, people Correct your spelling
their
they
thin
are choose
a city, according to Change the verb form
are choosing
thier
Correct your spelling
their
life style
. The most Correct your spelling
lifestyle
prefer
is, what is road condition, traffic and Change the form of the verb
preferred
convenet
about public access. Correct your spelling
convenient
Becuase
of Correct your spelling
Because
this
, some cities are overly croweded
to cars and some cities are concern about environment issueCorrect your spelling
crowded
,
and prefer Remove the comma
apply
a bicycles
Correct the article-noun agreement
bicycles
a bicycle
instead
of cars. I will beleved
that its case of Correct your spelling
believe
believed
geographycal
and easy access are metter. Correct your spelling
geographical
i
put light on both Change the capitalization
I
side
and Change to a plural noun
sides
last
, i
give my opinion.
The bigger cities, which has lots of people, they have to Change the capitalization
I
travelled
more to catch up with Change the verb
travel
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the
they
needs and for Change the pronoun
their
this
Add a comma
,
c
ar to minimise a travelled time. Add an article
a
For example
, they are many stores in cities but some people love to shop with Correct your spelling
particular
p
erticular shop. So, they go Add an article
a
thier
store to buy Correct your spelling
their
this
, even it is far away from that. Secondly
, the job are
lots of miles away from home. The two Change the verb form
is
reason
for Change to a plural noun
reasons
this
, first
is, the cost of living in p
rime location or Add an article
a
bussiness
area very high and Correct your spelling
business
thats
why they live far away from Correct your spelling
that's
thier
job area. Correct your spelling
their
Second
reason is, people prefer to live in Add an article
The second
p
eace area for Add an article
the
a
relaxe
and enjoy Correct your spelling
relax
lesiure
time with family.
Recently, most Correct your spelling
leisure
of
Verify preposition usage
apply
c
ities are suffering from pollution. They are Add an article
the
meny
cities , where pollution index for breath is Correct your spelling
many
unacceptable
high for Correct your spelling
unacceptably
humen
. Because of Correct your spelling
human
this
, People are suffering from new deasease
and increase problem in breathing. To cut Correct your spelling
disease
of
with Replace the word
off
this
problem, they are trying to getting i
dea to Add an article
the
an
reduced
a car and prefer Change the form of the verb
reduce
bycycles
for people health. The people are more Correct your spelling
bicycles
coucious
about Correct your spelling
cautious
conscious
curious
thier
health. the Correct your spelling
their
scientically
Correct your spelling
scientifically
proven
that when you ride Add the auxiliary verb
proved
has proven
bycycles
for Correct your spelling
bicycles
a
hour at every day will Change the article
an
incease
Correct your spelling
increase
a
10 years in life span.
we are facing lots of environment issue and people Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
averege
are reduced Correct your spelling
average
beacuse
of Correct your spelling
because
the
modern development. People are become Remove the article
apply
lasy
and do not care about Correct your spelling
lazy
environment
issue. My point of view is when people are adapt Replace the word
environmental
bycycles
rather Correct your spelling
bicycles
then
car. The cities Replace the word
than
are become
more Change to the active voice
become
have become
buatiful
and less noise on street. Correct your spelling
beautiful
This
is a
dvanced solution to fight with global warming and for better human life.Add an article
an
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