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Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same way as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is often argued that young culprits should receive the same type of punishments as of adults, for their role in crimes.
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, I strongly disagree with
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 point of view, as I believe teenagers mindset is of different from adults;
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,
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 punishments will influence them in a negative way. It is a proven fact that younger generations are subject to lack of maturity levels. Due to the immature levels, these youngsters commit crimes without considering the output of
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 actions. To put it simply, imposing adult level punishments would not give them a chance to change,
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, they remain criminals even after growing into adults.
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, India sends younger criminals to children jails, where the priority of
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 jails are to educate them.
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 measures helped 80% of them to lead a better life. Another reason why
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 adult punishments should not be considered is, they are thrown into a jail with adults. Younger culprits can be easily influenced by other inmates and continue their crimes even after release.
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ounger generation shows more interest to learn negative aspects.
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, the Brazil central jail has no boundaries to inmates based on their age.
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, several younger prisoners are influenced by other inmates and continued their crimes even after stepping into adulthood. In conclusion, younger kids should be treated differently and give them a chance to learn and to rethink past mistakes. In my opinion, treating them as adults will affect their mindset, which results in more crime.
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