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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Vegetarianism as a lifestyle is quite popular amongst the people living in Asian countries
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 many think differently. Not eating anything
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 of animal slaughter is not only considered as a healthy habit but it is often related
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 emotional sentiments.
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, the majority of
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lobal population still consumes meat or seafood as their staple
diet
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view point
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 of vegetarian people along with relevant examples.
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, inclination towards only consuming
plant based
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 food is mostly dependent
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 environment and regional factors. In some areas,
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 might not be a choice for the residents.
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, people who reside in areas with high snowfall tend to consume
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nimal-derived
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, considering the fact that the vegetation in the region is highly unlike due to the harsh weather.
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, citizens living on highly fertile soil where agriculture is practised are more susceptible to adapt
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vegetarian
lifestlye
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lifestyle
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,
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hought process of eating meat is somehow linked to religious emotions in several cultures and religions.
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, Jainism as a religion
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 strictly forbids killing and having any kind of living being as food. Due to the face that their religious leaders, preach them that doing so is a sin.
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, proving birth to an idea of making
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orld a better place by giving up on making a
diet
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 of any living creature on the planet. In conclusion, I opine that choosing a
diet
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 regime is dependent of numerous factors,
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, adopting and
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committing
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ide is a personal choice without any diversion towards
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positive
 or negative, it is
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 about availability, environment and a person's own belief.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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