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It was predicted that people in the 21st century would have much more free time than in the past. To what extent has this prediction come true?

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The latest technology has made life much easier as compared to ancient times by providing various electronic gadgets. Some
people
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 claim that the current generation has more free time rather than in the past decades. In my opinion,
people
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 have a more hectic schedule in the 21st century. Let me elaborate in detail with some relevant examples.
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people
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 used to do a lot of physical tasks rather than smart work in ancient times.
For instance
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, the farmers were using different kinds of
machines
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 to cultivate harvest as compared to today's generation.
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, there was no automatic machinery and it needed to operate manually.
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, it
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 predicted in a 2007 survey that
people
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 were
more healthy
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healthier
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 and
strong
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 as they were not lazy and
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 doing every task by themselves.
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, there was no internet for communication which made them write letters to their near and dear ones. Even
there
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though there
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 were not many options for entertainment
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 as TV, internet , video games and many more
so
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they were utilizing their free time
in
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at
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 work. On the other side, today's generation is
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 working hard for their necessities. It is worth considering that they are not doing a more physical task because they are equipped with various automatic
machines
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.
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, recent research conducted in India showed that 57% of employees are working from home because they have better options like laptops, mobile phones,
video
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and video
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 conferencing.
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, nowadays
people
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 do more smart work which allows them to get good opportunities in different sectors.
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, the candidate is expected to have excellent interpersonal skills
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 as co-operate ,
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and communications
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communications skill
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communication skills
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 in an interview which only comes with a smart job.
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, technology has provided
people
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 with different sources of entertainment so they like to spend time at their homes rather than going out for sports or to meet their friends. To put it in a nutshell, it is not fair to
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 that 21st-century
people
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 are
idler
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 because their duties have
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changed over
the
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times
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time
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. Even life has become much more stressful and hectic
whereas
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people
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 were more happy and healthy in the past. It is true that there are various
machines
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are
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available
such
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 washing
machines
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,
kitchen
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and kitchen
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 equipment which
was
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were
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 replaced by labour before.
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task response
In the introduction, clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the prediction that people have more free time in the 21st century. Provide a clear thesis statement that outlines your main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a consistent logical structure throughout the essay. Use linking words and phrases to develop the ideas in a clear and organized manner.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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