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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir, I am john studying at your
college
from
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for
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last
 two years and I always go to the cafeteria at lunchtime. I really like the menu of our
college
 cafe because of the variety of food. I usually y eat a vegetable sandwich from there which is healthy for me and take some coffee along with
this
.
Furthermore
, cleaning is very appreciable, all the table and chairs neat and clean throughout the day.
Staff
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 is commendable and gives good service to every customer.
Moreover
, the location is far from
college
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the college
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, it takes around 10 minutes to reach over there and I have just 30 minutes for the lunch break. I am coming all the way around the
college
 to reach the café.
This
 problem is facing by every student at the
college
.
In addition
 to
this
, I want to recommend that one door should be inside the
college
 so students do not need to go too far to reach there. The door should be accessible from the
college
. Yours sincerely, Manu
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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