You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir, I am john studying at your

college

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last

two years and I always go to the cafeteria at lunchtime. I really like the menu of our

college

cafe because of the variety of food. I usually y eat a vegetable sandwich from there which is healthy for me and take some coffee along with

this

Furthermore

, cleaning is very appreciable, all the table and chairs neat and clean throughout the day.

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is commendable and gives good service to every customer.

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, the location is far from

college

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, it takes around 10 minutes to reach over there and I have just 30 minutes for the lunch break. I am coming all the way around the

college

to reach the café.

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problem is facing by every student at the

college

In addition

this

, I want to recommend that one door should be inside the

college

so students do not need to go too far to reach there. The door should be accessible from the

college

. Yours sincerely, Manu

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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172 words

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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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In today's society, the media plays a significant role in shaping public opinion and influencing people's behavior. However, it also has its drawbacks. What problems can arise from the media's influence, and how can these issues be addressed?

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