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In the developed world the average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause individuals and the society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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It is clear that human longevity is growing in developed countries and we need to consider the impact of
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 on persons and society.
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 essay will discuss some of the problems which might arise and propose some ways to mitigate the issues. Nowadays, technology is helping all areas in society, the health system is benefiting from
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 and it is providing more conditions to increase the population’s age, what is bringing one problem together, more hospital beds occupied and
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 costs on it. One way to minimize the negative effects is to invest in preventive actions that result in more health for
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 as Yoga, Pilates, stretching classes, free knowledge about nutrition
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 healthy eating and natural disease treatment techniques.
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 important issue to consider is as old as people become, more the families have to consider who will be in charge of the treatment of
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 elder and the cost of that, during the years, the number of rest home receiving that kind of residents is increasing and to deal with
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 delicate question, the families need to consider the cost of it in the family financial planning and to have open discussions about the topic, doing
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, the society will feel themselves more comfortable to administer the issue and to find the best way to solve it. In conclusion, whether the government allows public policies that provide conditions to elderly to have access to alternative treatments and more healthy lifestyles and the families get
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wareness of the financial planning for caring for the elderly, all the main problems involved will be solved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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