Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, if you notice, many social groups have individuals who do not have a home to live in. It is believed by a certain populace that the finest way of helping these people, is to offer them
money
. I wholeheartedly disagree with
this
, in my opinion, the best sort of help one can offer, is to love them, and to offer them shelter where they can reside. To commence with, the older generation is craving for
someone
who would love them. Their chances of being accepted are lowered as they have no family to live with, leading to the obvious of having nobody to love them.
In other words
, they want
someone
who cares for them and
who
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they can depend on for their emotions and
someone
to speak to.
For example
, a survey by the esteemed New York Times stated the 64% of the older generation claimed they want
someone
who can be affectionate towards them when they are alone.
This
illustrates that our previous generations expect us to be more compassionate towards them.
Secondly
, the homeless would need a shelter where they can have the necessities and amenities in place. Elaborating it
further
, as they are living on the streets, they are prone to diseases, with no proper meals, and are exposed to pollution on the daily. Giving them shelter would be most appropriate which would help them in living healthily. Case in point, a Google report from
last
year stated the 44% of people living on the streets
asked
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for a home to live in as their
first
demand during a national survey.
Furthermore
, many people have refused to accept
money
and
instead
asked to be admitted into community homes as
money
would only solve their problems temporarily. In conclusion, there is no alternative to love, care, and the feeling of having a home. In my opinion, there are far more important alternatives than
m
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oney that the homeless required and would appreciate.
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