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All children should be given a laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 techno-savvy era, the usage of
technology
 is increasing day-by-day. Some believe that the students of the high school should allow using a laptop when they start their high schooling.
This
 essay will discuss why is it entirely unnecessary to give a laptop to the pupils during their high school study.
To begin
 with, the
technology
 is becoming a major part of the daily life of everyone's, but
this
 will create a problem sometimes.
For example
, the
technology
 has lots of benefits as well as drawbacks too and by giving the computer to the students will encourage them to spend their quality time on the
technology
 and it will affect their health. It promotes a sedentary lifestyle and
this
 lifestyle is a reason for numerous health issues. In
this
 way, the students might get problems.
Moreover
, in these days,
technology
 is
also
 offering various unwanted material and websites, from which the learners might distract towards those materials which affect their mental health.
For instance
, in
this
 technological era, the internet provides a huge amount of 18+ material which is not good for the students to explore and it will misguide them, and they might distract from their study. To conclude,
technology
 is a blessing of God, but only if we can use it for the right purposes.
This
 essay discussed that
technology
 might
disguide
Correct your spelling
disguise
 the erasers and they have to face the energy issues. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement that the students should allow accessing the laptop while entering high school.
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