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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic
 jams have become a problem in many cities, and one of the solutions
that is
 offered is by providing free public
transport
 for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. In my point of view, that solution could reduce
traffic
 congestion, but
that is
 not the best method to be implemented to solve the problem.
This
 essay will provide my point of view about the best way to overcome the
traffic
 jam. Building transportation
that is
 operated 24 hours with no charge will help people to have a wide range of options to go to their own destination, and with that, they will consider using public
transport
 rather than their own vehicle. On the other side,
this
 idea will impact the society from middle to lower income. They will save the money that used to be used for
transport
.
However
, building free
transport
 to overcome
traffic
 jams is not really impactful for people from middle to high-income levels who have more than one car or motorcycle. Folks from that class will consider the comfort aspect rather than the price that will be cost.
Therefore
, driving with
Correct pronoun usage
their own
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own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
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 vehicle will be the best preference for them.
For example
 in the capital city of Indonesia, Jakarta, there is a wide range of transportation modes that can be used
such
 as MRT, LRT, and, TRANSJAKARTA, but unfortunately, the amount of society
that is
 self-driving is still many. In conclusion, free public transportation should be considered to overcome a
traffic
 jam, conservely, the aspect of comfort should be prioritized in order to fit with every class of citizens, especially folks from mid to high income.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a clear main idea supported by examples or explanations. Consider using a variety of linking words to better connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
task achievement
Develop your main points further with specific, relevant examples. Remember to directly answer the essay question and clearly express the extent of your agreement or disagreement throughout the essay, not just in the conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • personal vehicles
  • infrastructure
  • service frequency
  • sustainable city planning
  • financial implications
  • congestion charges
  • promoting cycling or walking
  • ride-sharing apps
  • smart traffic management systems
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