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Some people think that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfacory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try to improve such situations. Give your opinion.

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Many people believe that the best solution to deal with problems is the acceptance of them as it is. While others believe that by taking action we can improve emerging problems and that will be a better option. I support those who consider that improving a bad situation can bring us much better results than by doing nothing. Some people believe in the white and black periods of
life
,
therefore
 doing extra efforts seemed to them useless and nonsensical, because they think that sometimes you need to wait when the wind brings you a new perspective. I know some people who believe in the external forces
such
 as stars because they believe that the
world
 works in accordance with space and stars
moreover
 as they suggest our
life
 partially or fully programmed by some of those forces. In spite of that, I tend to think that we are responsible for our being and decision we made and none of the force is unable to influence us.
Nonetheless
 of that, others believe, that we must navigate our
life
 because we are human and able to think over the solutions. 
This
 happens, because of our nature and desire to solve problems, that in some cases bring us luck. To illustrate that, the story about the
first
 lady captain in sailing competition across the
world
 would be the best example. At the beginning of sailing, sports captains were only men and no one wanted to take women on the board because there was a belief that women bring failure,
as a result
, she decided to fight with that judgement on her own and created
f
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irst yacht with women on the board exclusively and headed her team. Afterwards, she becomes
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irst woman captain in
world
 history, who won the
world
 race. In my opinion,
this
 example shows us that taking action problems might be improved significantly and not only for our lives, but
also
 inspire others to conquer the peaks of their
life
.  In conclusion, even if some on that side when by doing nothing and accept everything as it is, seemed to them as the best solution. Others tend to disagree with it because we can deal with problems and make
this
world
 better.
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