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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Education gives us a knowledge of the world around us and changes it into something better. In
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21th
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 century, we now have many more
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 regarding where and how to find that knowledge. Study aboard has a good benefit to increase their chance
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securing
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ecent position,
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it would be culture shock
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 their
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. Certainly, there are numerous
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dvantage of studying
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ifferent country. Many students should
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do
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, if you are interested in English advance, Oxford university has an excellent reputation. Educating from here, they believe will increase their chance of securing
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ecent position when
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 back home. Studying aboard
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 can get a good relationship with people of various nationalities.
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, living far away from your family and friends can enable young people to become more independent and self-sufficient. Unfortunately, the experience of studying aboard is not always a positive one. The
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suggest
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 that the small people who
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 aboard struggle to adapt their new environment and suffer from culture shocks.
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asual uniform
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 good experience at the foreign university is
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pen mind. If a student is presented with
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 opportunity, they should certainly seize it.
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