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All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reason for this rise in obesity, How could it be tickled?

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Nations worldwide are dealing with the increasing issue of obesity which is a cause for concern for all age groups. There are two main causes of overconsumption of fast
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 and lack of exercise. Possible solutions would be a government tax on fast
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 and special incentives for
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ym membership to get people exercising One of the reasons that people are becoming overweight cheese days is that they are eating more junk
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 ready meats and convenience
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 rather than cooking healthy meals at home.
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 is because many people tend to lead a busy life so after a long day at
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,it is easier to just buy convenience
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 or get a takeaway
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 2 2015 Report by the UK government found that sales of these types of foods have sen considerably in the past 20 years To tackle
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 issue the power should take steps to increase the tax on trans fats, high sugar or unhealthy foods.
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, people would think twice about the foods they consume which could lead to them losing weight Another problem that needs to be considered is a lack of exercise.
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 of leading a hectic life with
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 commitments, many people are just too tired to go to the
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 or join a sports club.
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, the vast majority of people prefer to come home and sit in front of the TV.
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, when people have time off they tend to relax rather than go to a
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 one possible solution is for employers to consider the well being of their employees and offer in house company Eyms or special incentives
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 as discounts to join sports or fitness clubs. If
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 is implemented it would have a positive effect on peoples health and a reduction in weight gain In conclusion, being overweight an increasing issue because of consumption of fast
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, convenience foods and not enough exercise due to
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 commitments. The ministry needs to look at taxing taste
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 and companies should set up incentives for
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, sports or fitness clubs.

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