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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that in educational institutions,
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ariety of subjects are being taught to the students. It is often argued that secondary schools should
also
 include unpaid community services as an essential
subject
 for today's young generation. I strongly agree with
this
 notion as
this
 can certainly help students to develop their social skills as well as to be a more responsible citizen. To commence with, these services help in maintaining interpersonal and intrapersonal skills in youngsters. They begin to think more actively and start interacting with people which diminishes the social isolation among them. Adolescence
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 more confident while visiting various community services
centers
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such
 as NGOs, charity homes. A recent survey has shown that 85% of the children who participated in these unpaid activities in the
last
 year adhered the fact that
this
 helped in achieving
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lethora of skills into them and made them much happier than before.
Therefore
,
this
subject
 can certainly enhance
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hild's personality.
Furthermore
, social skills help youngsters to be more dedicated
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 needy people. By making
this
subject
 as the compulsory one, students get to know about the real situations of the nation and how they can contribute
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 it. They take participation in each and every activity.
In addition
, they learn to spend
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mount in the right direction without having any monetary expectations in return which makes them benevolent towards poverty-stricken. To recapitulate, I definitely accept
this
 fact to have charity services as a necessary
subject
 in the schools which can aid students to analyze the situations more accurately, develop the ideas and react on those with a grateful manner.
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