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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a
job
working in the City Museum
shop
during the holidays. You decide to apply for the
job
. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have explain why you are interested in the
job
Dear Sir or Madam, I write in reference to the
job
advertised for the City Museum
shop
on The Times newspaper. My name is Srinath Pallamparthy, and I am 21-years old studying Indian history in St. Xavier
college
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. I am very much keen in working
this
summer. Previously I worked at Redsocks gift
shop
as a cashier for 2-years. I
also
worked as a customer
attendent
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for 1 year at a gas station in
Kingroy
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. I have experience in handling a cash register. During these jobs
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I have developed communication skills and can speak English fluently. I enjoy visiting museums, and I covered most of the museums in our country as a part of my education in Indian history. I can use
this
knowledge in guiding the customers to purchase
souveniers
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from the
shop
.
Also
,
this
job
can help me in studying more about history while working at the same time. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Srinath Pallamparthy

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