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The quality of the health care a person receives should not depend on the size of their bank balance. The government is responsible for providing a high level of healthcare for all its citizens. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ???

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Technology advancement can be seen in all aspects of life including healthcare. Technology advancement, discovered various expensive and required instruments to check the overall health of a human. Due to the high price, a normal
person
 can not afford these.
Although
 some people think a poor
person
 should
also
 be able to get the benefits of the high standard treatments, others say high-level treatments should be chargeable.
This
 essay will delve into both vantage points, and
subsequently
 will explore my own perspective in turns. There are considerable benefits associated to provide high-level healthcare support for all citizens. Increase in the average age of a
person
 is a major advantage. To explain in detail, with free and
treatment
 with high-class instruments, a poor
person
 will
also
 be able to get the
treatment
 of the dangerous decease.
For example
, nowadays, there is a spread of coronavirus and a lot of population is infected by
this
 virus and
this
 virus spreads very fast so proper
treatment
 is required and on an urgent basis. The cost of ventilators in private hospitals is not bearable by a common
person
.
Thus
, with help from the
government
, these facilities can be provided and the life of a common
person
 can be saved.
Moreover
, with the medical help from the
government
,there will be less burden on common people to bear expensive medical treatments and saved money he can spend in the education of his children. That will
also
 increase the overall satisfaction and that will
also
 distinctly reduce crime. There are some disadvantages attached to free health care benefits. Developed nations already have a lot of resources and money, that they can spend to provide free benefits to all. For developing nations, it is hard to spend a lot of money without any financial gains. Free
treatment
 to all can cause high loss to the
government
, so, for growing nations, these benefits should be restricted to a limited amount of people. In conclusion, the advantages attached to high standard medical benefits to all people of the nation outweigh the disadvantages. With some regulations from the
government
,these advantages can be overcome.
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