At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages ?

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The given maps illustrate how the Islip centres

looks

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currently and how it is expected to look in the future. Overall, The Islip

town

is planned to grow significantly. With some new facilities and new infrastructure arrangements. Currently, The Islip centre has a main

road

that crosses the

town

from the west side to the east. Along

this

main

road

, there are shops on either side of it. The main

road

has two alternative ways. The

first

one is located before the shops and it

conducs

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conducts

conduct

toward a school in the south-west of the

town

. The

second

one is placed at the end of the shops and it drives to a

park

located in the East-south. The

town

also

provided with housing between the school and

park

and

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countryside in the north. In the future, the main

road

will

not

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longer be the same.

Instead

, a dual carriageway will be built and it will be surrounding the centre of the city. Within the dual carriageway, there will be several facilities. On the

North side

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of the

road

, there will be a new bus station, a shopping centre, a car

park

and

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new housing.

Also

, there will be

a pedestrians

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way roughly where the main

road

is now. Underneath the

pedestraians

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pedestrians

pedestrian

way, there will be a number of shops that will be limited by the dual carriageway. In the future, the school and

park

are expected to remain in the same location.

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3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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productivity
innovation
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