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Government should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is argued by some people that
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ational budget of a
country
 should be spent more on the educational facilities rather than the entertainment and games amenities. It is agreed that government funding must be distributed to more on
education
 than on other sectors.
This
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firstly
 discuss the economic benefit that can be achieved through investing in
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ducational sector, and
secondly
 discuss the social benefit that a
country
 can gain; followed by a reasoned conclusion. A good reason to spend money on schools, colleges, universities and research institutes is the desire to build a
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country
. The more educated person a nation has, the more economic growth that
country
 enjoys.
This
 is because knowledgeable people always use their brain to improve their
country
’s socio-economic condition by inventing new products, rules or policies.
This
 is illustrated by the fact that Singapore’s GDP increased to 20% in 2013, whereas it was only 10% in 2000.
This
 had been achieved because of giving focus on
education
. Another point to consider is that educated people are more aware of criminal activities and possess strong moral values compared to uneducated people.
Therefore
, spending more money on
education
 helps a government to build a crime-free and strong ethical
country
 in a convenient way.
For example
, an empirical study in 2019 conducted by
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Cambridge University found that Japanese government always gives priorities on
education
 from the primary level to tertiary level. In conclusion,
this
 essay supports the idea of allocating more money on a
country
’s educational system rather than on entertainment or sports because of having many economic and social benefits.
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