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Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good members of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A huge part of society believes that it is the responsibility of the parents to educate their young ones to be a nice member whereas the other part thinks it to be the job of the university to teach the same to its students. In my opinion, both academy and the parents play an equally significant role in the education and upbringing of our future generation. We will examine both the view in the below paragraphs.
To begin
 with, a child starts learning from the day it is born and they spend at least 3 years of their life learning only at home i.e., the time before they get into the kinder-garden institute. And age 0-3years is a time where our brains adapt the quickest.
Therefore
, the mother and father an extremely crucial part of teaching their offspring to be humble and nice for the community they are living in.
For example
, it is our duty to tuite our children that it is a good gesture to greet whomever we meet.
On the other hand
, since we spend around 12-15years of our lives educating ourselves at school, it is needless to say that it is
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ob of our teaching institution to guide the future of the nation not only about academics but to be a responsible citizen as well. To illustrate it better, along with studies the child should
also
 know that it is important to respect elders and help them. To conclude, I see
this
 to be a 2-way thing, where both parents and the school should contribute to the same amount in nurturing their younger-generation for a healthy, happy eco-system.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • instilling
  • mimicking
  • social norms
  • ethical behavior
  • citizenship education
  • societal expectations
  • interpersonal skills
  • collaboration
  • diverse environment
  • microcosm
  • communication skills
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