Some people believe that a great difference in age between people and children is more beneficial. Do you think the advantages of a greater difference in age between them outweigh the disadvantages?
The number of couples that choose to have children at a much later there are
age
tend
to do so because they would have time for their relationship and careers. Change the verb form
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,
both
pros and cons to this
decision.
Fisrtly
, the advantages of Correct your spelling
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much later in life allows couples to establish themselves and their careers. By doing Correct your spelling
conceiving
this
, it ensures that they are both
emotionally and financially stable before taking on the responsibility of a child. For instance
, a couple in their early 20s would be less equipped with their finances to meet the demands of parenthood
. In contrast
, a professional couple in their mid 30s
to 40s would have had a rather comfortable sum to ensure that they can take on the Add a hyphen
mid-30s
responsibitly
easily. Correct your spelling
responsibility
In addition
, couples would have time to travel the world and explore without having to worry about their children. This
gives them a sense of freedom and also
, they can spend that time to build their relationship. These could be reasons why people would prefer having children at a later age
.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of a
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parenthood
might bring about medical complications. It is a known fact that the risks of complications rises
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age
in both
genders. These,
could range from miscarriages to irreversible defects to the foetus. Research has shown that women aged 35 years of Remove the comma
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age
and above are more likely to experience a miscarriage, then
compared to a women age
30 and below. Also
, men experience a decrease in their testostrone
levels with Correct your spelling
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age
and because of this
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for people to not wait for a great difference in Correct your spelling
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age
gap as well.
To conclude, given that there is freedom and financially before planning out parenthood
, we should instead
avoid the medical complications that arise from late pregnancy. I strongly believe, that in order to be fair to both
ourselves and the child, we should plan for parenthood
as soon as we can in order to avoid the painful process that entails a huge age
difference and complications.Submitted by sanjani_basdeo on
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