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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? To what extend do you agree or disagree

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Whether people should follow the opinion of public figures, authors or bloggers on general topics is a subject of controversy. Many people often argued that, whereas in my notion, I completely agree that
this
 is a positive cause and
this
 essay will elucidate in depth.
Firstly
, who is famous other than authorities and powerful politics? Anyone who has followers in millions or billions becomes famous because the nation has provided value to their concerns and moves. There are various famous persons worldwide who are working for social welfare and spreading positivity among nations, by giving street talks and extended campaigns on general public matters either it is for students, youth or professionals. To illustrate
this
, a year ago Young Pharmacist Association came into existence with the collaboration of famous health blogger, for additional seats in government sectors by stopping degree rentals
thus
, authorities were forced to act against the pharmaceutical owners. That not only opened doors for unemployed degree holders but
also
 economy led.
Secondly
, it has tremendous benefits and a good step for community and societies who cannot approach to higher authorities for certain matters.
Nonetheless
, their concerns towards the public are unaccountable with shocking positive outcomes. To add more, an Arabic figure, who started working on family disputes around the city, saved many broken families.
Furthermore
, their enormous speeches and messages on various topics,
such
 as; health awareness, education and vocational courses for impoverished families.
Therefore
, their suggestions have had been flourishing many lives around us. In conclusion, I reckon that bits of advice being delivered by famous people on common subjects always have concrete reasons to act upon,
thus
, beneficial for the nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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