Recent advances in air travel have focused only on those sitting in upper class and have left other passengers with no benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A few decades ago air movements were available only for rich sectors of society. These days, fortunately, air travels are going to become very common, because it is a
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, comfortable and
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way to cope with a long distance. The majority of people buys economy
class
tickets, but they recon, they
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any benefits. I totally agree with
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I will
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explain
my opinion.
Firstly
, we all realize, flying is expensive and not only because of the cost of fuel. There is so much more that goes into a ticket price. What actually makes flying so expensive are crew costs, using
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airports
, taxes, regular maintenances of planes and, of course, non-flying part of
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usiness. But few people know, that proceeds from the selling economy
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tickets only cover the cost of
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light.
Hence
, economy
class
is not how airlines make money.
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is in premium classes.
As a result
, a vast majority of the profit comes from the minority of
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passengers
.
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how to sell the same product for different prices to different people. The overall product is the same - a flight from point A to point B. What is different is the experience within the plane.
That is
why the airlines are interested in improving amenities and food for
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class
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passengers
to sell expensive tickets. It just makes more money.
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, if an airline could fill
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lane full of business and
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class
passangers
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passengers
, it would. In conclusion, the experience of flying is the luxury itself and not a lot of money goes to the airline. I agree that recent advances in air travel are focused on premium
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sections since most of
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evenue comes from there.
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