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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspaper #source
The
internet
 is beginning to rival
newspaper
 as the best place to find information about what is happening in the world. I believe
this
 trend will continue, and the
internet
 will soon be just as important as the traditional ones. On the one hand, I believe that
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ewspaper continue to be is a vital source of information even in the
internet
 age.
Firstly
,
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 the most traditional means of communicating the news, and not everyone wants to or is able to use
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nternet
instead
.
For example
, old people or those in rural areas might not have the ability of opportunity to get online, while many of
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 simply prefer
newspaper
 even if we do have
internet
 access.
Secondly
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ewspaper can be trusted as reliable sources of news because they employ professional journalists and editors.
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, many people like the experience to hold
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ewspaper and the feeling of reading
newspaper
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nternet is likely to become just as popular as
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ewspaper for
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reasons. The main reason is that it allows us much faster access to news in
real time
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 and wherever we are,
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different
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 and mobile devices. Another key benefit of online news compared to newspapers is the ability to share articles, discuss them with other people, give our views, and even contribute their own updates on social media.
For instance
, there has been an explosion in the use of platforms like Facebook and Youtube where anyone can share their news and views. A final point is that
this
 source of news is less damaging to the environment. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that
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ewspaper will continue to be the main source of news
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 because I
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 that the
internet
 will soon be equally important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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