Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

The
internet
is beginning to rival
newspaper
as the best place to find information about what is happening in the world. I believe
this
trend will continue, and the
internet
will soon be just as important as the traditional ones. On the one hand, I believe that
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ewspaper continue to be is a vital source of information even in the
internet
age.
Firstly
,
newspaper
are
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the most traditional means of communicating the news, and not everyone wants to or is able to use
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nternet
instead
.
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, old people or those in rural areas might not have the ability of opportunity to get online, while many of
use
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simply prefer
newspaper
even if we do have
internet
access.
Secondly
,
n
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a

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ewspaper can be trusted as reliable sources of news because they employ professional journalists and editors.
Lastly
, many people like the experience to hold
n
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ewspaper and the feeling of reading
newspaper
.
On the other hand
,
i
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nternet is likely to become just as popular as
n
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a
the

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ewspaper for
a
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an

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of
variety
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various

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reasons. The main reason is that it allows us much faster access to news in
real time
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real-time

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and wherever we are,
one
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apply

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different
gadgets
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gadget

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and mobile devices. Another key benefit of online news compared to newspapers is the ability to share articles, discuss them with other people, give our views, and even contribute their own updates on social media.
For instance
, there has been an explosion in the use of platforms like Facebook and Youtube where anyone can share their news and views. A final point is that
this
source of news is less damaging to the environment. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that
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ewspaper will continue to be the main source of news
,
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because I
belive
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believe

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that the
internet
will soon be equally important.
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