In many countries today, parents are able to choose to sent their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extend do you agree?

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that is
gaining popularity these days.
Although
there is no unified verdict on
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it is beneficial or
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to children today, I think, students being in
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schools may have difficulties later in life. In
this
essay
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I will explain my opinion. Some parents believe that by eliminating the distractions it becomes easier to retain the knowledge that teachers offer.
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why they do not want their children to be in co-educational schools, because,
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at
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period, students of the
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sex
can be a distraction.
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, these students tend to not feel the
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of gender roles and learn to pursue areas that interested them no matter what is considered socially acceptable for their biological
sex
. Despite
this
, I consider, the average workspace does not make men and women work in separate corners. There is an expectation for everyone to work together. From my point of view,
the
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school environment is a place where young generation learns what life will be like when
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enter the
the
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real world. Having both men and women in classes allow students of both
sex
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to interact with a wider range of people and learn how to work with and talk to people of the opposite
sex
. Same-gander classes limit
this
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. Taking everything into consideration, I cannot agree with the idea that one
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education is better for children
,
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because they do not have an opportunity to learn communication skills with
o
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pposite
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.
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it may be easier for students to participate actively and do well academically at a one-
sex
institution, the
real life
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is not single-
sex
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