some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that the way we live has been transformed dramatically for many years.

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it is sometimes thought that, currently, mankind is highly interdepended, the opposite group believes that people are

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independent

. In my opinion, I firmly consider the present generation lives more freely than the old one because of the latest technological advancement. On the one hand, those who debate in favour of dependency claim that since society prefers to maintain a standard of life among its members, they often require highly sophisticated gadgets and equipment, which may not be locally available. Due to

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, they purchase things from other places,

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, in Kerala, they hugely

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dependent

on Tamilnadu, a

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neighbouring

state, for various food products, vice versa as well. As modern facilities minimise various barriers, which was observed previously. And I support

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argument as I think people are well connected in many aspects of

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life.

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, the opponents of the above-mentioned belief consider that, now, everyone is self-centred, and hardly

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seeking

support from others.

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is because they can have whatever they require just a click away, which means, the online services allow them to access everything without anyone's

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, banking, shopping, ordering food and booking services are now possible from the home itself and no need to ask help from others.

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group argue that

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society is hugely

independed

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independent

. In conclusion, when some think that our global

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village

is connected so well, another view is just opposite to

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, in my concept

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the former's thought is true since the advanced technology bringing everyone closer. It is predicted that

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situation would continue, even,

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalization
technological advancements
collective action
digital evolution
minimal reliance
direct interaction
empowered
access to technology
societal expectations
personal choice
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