The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicines. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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The authority should fund the citizens to get rid of any health issues since the prevention of a disease is better than cure. There are many things in
this
century which are detrimental to the health of a person. I advocate with the above-mentioned opinion.
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essay will comprise of all possible ways of preventing illness. In my opinion, the concept of "prevention is better than cure" should be echoed among the country, since most of the diseases can be detected earlier before a serious outcome can occur
this
can undoubtedly help to save millions of lives, to cite an example if there were proper measures taken prior by the medical organizations in Wuhan, China COVID-19, would not have been a pandemic.
However
, above concept can be easily up-rooted by the authority by implementing new rules and regulations on the health-care sector if they can make monthly health checkups to be free and mandatory for every citizen of that country, so many inevitable diseases like cancers can be easily prevented.
Additionally
, fitness practitioners should be appointed by the government to have exercise programs for adults and children since most people these days have a sedentary and unhealthy lifestyle.
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by WHO has proven that daily exercises help to reduce cardiovascular diseases
Secondly
, there should be seminars organized by the government to give every individual a well-established education of the most prevailing healthcare problems which often occurs these days, and the disadvantages of medications should be thoroughly discussed because due to long term usage of these drugs many serious side effects were being vastly noted throughout the world,
then
the citizens will get a crystal clear idea of the concept, "prevention is better than cure". Generally speaking, it is clearly visible that support and funding are highly necessary to prevent medical issues among the citizens,
this
will not only provide an advantage to the people but it helps the jurisdiction too since less major disease means the authority doesn't have to trade expensive foreign medications.
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