In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
The verb pay may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.
The noun phrase house seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun security in your sentence. Consider removing it.
You have used the compound adjective more safe. Consider using the comparative form of this adjective.
The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word area.
The noun phrase attack seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The word talking doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
The noun phrase pressure seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
It appears that the preposition between may be unnecessary in this context. Consider removing it.
The verb have does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.
It appears that the preposition with may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.
It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in my opinion. Consider adding a comma.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.