governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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need. Many believe that the government should
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more in building railways than roads.
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essay agrees with the statement as there are several benefits that come with allocating the government budget to railways
such
as, solving the traffic congestion issues and seeing the long-term
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for a better railways’ system. It is undeniable that, worldwide, the growth of car ownership has grown exponentially in the past decade and it has caused the whole world in a big traffic issue. One of the most visible
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is to switch from riding
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ar to
train
. With
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extra funds in improving the
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systems, it is expected more people will opt to take the
train
than other public transportations.
Moreover
, each
train
carriage can hold up to 100 passengers which equals to the number of people that 20 cars
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able to carry.
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, the public transport ministry in Jakarta has been encouraging the citizens to use
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rain as their mean for travel by adding the number of carriage of each
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and it has been proven to reduce the number of cars on the road. Trains
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a great promise to be the future of transportation.
This
can be achieved by improving the speed of the
train
especially for the ones used for long-distance travel.
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, with better railways, it can
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the demand for super-speed carriage that resulted in
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rastic change in the time of arrival as if the passengers were driving their cars.
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, Japan and some countries in Europe, have been working on increasing the velocity of their trains so that it can reduce the travelling time by 30% and these trains are expected to be available for trial in 2022. In conclusion, with pre-existing problems with the roads, it is more beneficial for the government to allocate their funding to railways. As mentioned, it will solve the massive traffic congestion issue and be the future of travelling.
Although
these benefits will not show a great result in short-term,
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we have to consider the long-term effects of having a better
train
and railway system.
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  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
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  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
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  • Public expenditure
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