Although modern life has brought with it improvements in people's standard of living, people are not generally happy with their lives. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that everybody has personal commitments. When they cannot complete their role and
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responsibilities
toward family due to
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factors,
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many serious troubles. Despite
this
, by following certain strategies, they could solve these for a great extend. Regarding imbalance in the work-life can have huge repercussions on the employees' both personal and professional life.
First
of all, neither they get chance to participate
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various functions at home nor available for loved one when they require.
Consequently
, there is a high probability to irrupt
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aberrations
between couples,
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, even, end up in divorce.
For instance
, in India, one of the most significant reasons for family problems is poor bonding due to busy working schedules. These issues can badly impact on professional life as well.
However
, the above-mentioned hurdles can be effectively
managedd
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managed
if the government implement strict employment laws which ensure the work-life balance.
First
of all, the company should not expect their staff connected to them throughout day and night, which means out of working hours, neither they are contacted
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forced to do overtime, without their prior permission.
For example
, if the staff are asked to work extra time, they should be
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compensated
with double salary and other incentives to appreciate since they sacrifice family time for the betterment of the firm. In conclusion, it has been noted that
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ajority of workaholic people have either family or
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professional
problems, sometimes, both.
This
situation can be minimised by following some stricter employment laws and providing extra fringe benefits to those who dedicate their lives for their profession.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • fast-paced environment
  • stress levels
  • anxiety
  • social disconnection
  • face-to-face interactions
  • loneliness
  • materialism
  • consumerism
  • temporary satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • unhealthy habits
  • physical and mental health
  • environmental degradation
  • disparities
  • social justice
  • income inequality
  • disadvantaged
  • healthcare advancements
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