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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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Today we are living in
such
 a
world
 where education is affecting every area of human's
life
. More or less, every nation in the
world
 follows the western education system. A human or community without literacy is like jungle game. Nowadays many students prefer
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tudy abroad option due to various reasons. The countries like India and China where large numbers of students do their study for the different courses. Some of them are correspondent and others are on regular basis. Asian developing-countries has huge numbers of
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orkforce
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workforce
 in the
world
. Today many people in the
world
 enjoying quality
life
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good
 standard of living due to their study abroad decision.
This
 decision allowed them to work in different countries
as a result
 of
this
 they emigrated. Their family members
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 enjoying
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etter
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better
life
 because of improvement in financial condition.
For instance
, a student from a poor country who successfully completed computer engineering get
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 job in western countries which changes his entire
life
 completely.
On the other hand
, various students face a huge gap between there educational course and actual job because different countries have different pattern and conditions.
For instance
, a student who takes admission for the teaching course and learn how to handle 10 students in the class but after he came back to home country when and asked to handle 50 students his
life
 will be more stressful. It is often seen that similar decision hit hard to
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oin-family concept. Study and settle abroad concept is very popular. When there are few benefits and more drawbacks to of it.
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