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The only reason to work hard is to earn money.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since time immemorial, there is a section of society which firmly believes that working hard is the sole reason of earning. Whereas, there is a section of the community which have a difference in opinion.
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 essay will discuss both the views and in the end,I will give my opinion.
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 with, if we look at the era before liberalisation and urbanisation homosapiens were not acquainted with a
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 of technologies and education. Having said that, it meant that the sources for expansion for individuals were limited and there was no global exposure,
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, the people worked really hard for their livelihood. To illustrate, humankind which was working in textiles industries need to do everything from their hand which takes a
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 of physical strength to produce a smaller quantity of finished goods.
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, the generation like ours has exposure to a
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 of up to the minute automation which hardly requires any substantial power. A person in one part of the lobe can deal with another person in another dimension of the world. Globalisation indeed has given us a plethora of new opportunities where anyone can choose what they want and can follow their passion.
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, a java developer stationed in India can remotely work on a project which is commenced in America. To conclude, I strongly opine that working hard should not be the only element for earning money and other factors must be taken into consideration. As we live in
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ot of new ways to earn money.
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