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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantage outweigh disadvantage?

#experts #children #language #school #advantage
There will be a few people who will disagree
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 the benefit of learning two or
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. There is,
however
; some disagreement over the best ages
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 learning another
language
. In
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school
, rather than in high
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 and explain why I think that the advantages outweigh
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isadvantages. Those who oppose
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starting in primary
school
, do so primarily for two misconceptions.
First
 of all, they believe that children at so early age are not even familiar with the vocabulary and grammar rules of their own mother
language
, and how can cope up with new languages? And another one is, since they have to take lots of pressure of both basic education and foreign
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arly age, it may hamper both because of pressure. And
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nd of the day result may be nothing but
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otal loss. When it comes to
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 anything,
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 way and ability of children is far more different
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 adults. As children
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 the natural ability to learn anything more developed than adults; especially in
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ase of languages. In a family where the parents talk in different languages, children can talk
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both languages naturally. Since
this
 process is similar to learning at primary
school
, it will help children to learn naturally and quickly a
second
language
. And if it delays till secondary
school
, the learning ability will not be malleable like the children’s.
As a result
; it will be harder to learn while the fluency and skill will not be still the same. In another word, it will be too late. In conclusion,
although
 some still argue against
language
 lessons in primary
school
, their concerns are baseless. In my opinion, children who start learning at a young age have far better prospects than those who try to pick up a
language
 later in life.
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