Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most of the people spend their leisure

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watching television rather than with family or neighbours. Many may see it as a trend without drawbacks, but I believe it harms our social interaction as well as health and mental well-being. The

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and foremost reason is that in

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faced pace era, for the sake of earning more money, people prefer to work hard and living sedentary lifestyle. But when they get the luxury of free

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, they spend it on watching movies and shows on

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, which hamper their social relationship as well as health well-being. To be more specific, less socialization is a sense for weakening the social fabric of society and family relationships.

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, according to the Tribune newspaper, after coming home from the office, people spend most of their

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watching television rather than their life partner, which is the core reason for increasing divorce cases. The

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worth mentioning the reason is that in today's era people are more enthusiastic to know what is happening around the world rather than in their areas.

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why they prefer to watch

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on festivals like Diwali, Holi, independence day more willingly than celebrating it with family and society, which is the major cause of decreasing social harmony.

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month one of my friends told me he spends most of his free

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watching the football game on

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, but he never goes out to play it with friends.

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is the most popular way to pass out vacant

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. People can watch movies at home with the family at home, which makes their relations strong.

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, less social people spend their life freely without fear of being judge by judgemental people of the family which increase their mental peace.

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, According to Indian psychologist, people who spend most of the

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away from society with their family or alone watching

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, are mentally strong. To conclude,

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is the best and inexpensive way of entertainment,

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, it has a detrimental impact on our social relationship, as well as on our fitness

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as eyes problem, heart health, etc. Excess of everything is bad, so it's essential to make a fine balance in work, social and personal life.

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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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