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Some people believe the media should be allowed to publish private information about people, while others are against it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion and relevant examples.

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Media has infiltrated into the lives of all people around the world.
This
 is believed by many people that the press should be allowed to write about personal lives for people but there is a significant number of people who believe the opposite.
However
, I support the latter and I believe that personal
life
 should be limited to people themselves,
hence
 should not be publicized. My opinion is
further
 argued in the penultimate paragraph. Out of the various arguments, the foremost argument which the supporters of media publishing about the personal lives of people put forward is that people should be aware of the things happening in their favourite people’s lives. They consider
this
 not to be harmful at all as their intension behind
this
 act is to have a glimpse of their personal
life
. The difference between the reel and real-
life
 of any artists can be depicted through media and news.
Moreover
, in politics, people come to know about their favourite leader’s social works through the means of social media and other online platforms. On the other side, people should not forget that even those big actors, artists and politicians are human beings as well and they deserve some privacy. On the grounds of human rights invasion into the personal
life
 of the people is not acceptable and should be avoided. To exemplify
this
, a famous magazine published about a named couple in
f
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ilm industry which led them to break their alliance.
In addition
 to
this
, public figures often tend to have enemies and personal information can lead them to blackmail those reputed figures of society.
Thus
, to conclude, privacy brings security and there should be no intervention by anyone into another person’s
life
. Privacy is a fundamental right for all human beings regardless of their race, ethnicity and social status. The government should control it and avoid the arising of conflicts due to
this
 issue.
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