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Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem.

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These days, a massive issue is deforestation and most areas that have forests are not only reducing quickly but
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 coming to an end. I will discuss the main reasons for
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 epidemic and
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 describe the possible effects and solutions to the problem. In my opinion, these matters have some reasons
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 as overpopulation and improving technology.
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, the number of global societies has been increasing really fast because the level of medicine and lifestyle are changing, and these people need a place for presentation, so they destroyed Jangle to build their houses, roads, and factories. To illustrate, the north of Iran has good weather; so that, a lot of people migrate to
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 area;
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, they have been destroying forests to build accommodation places. Unfortunately, deforestation has a lot of effects on global warming which is altering our lifestyle. when we destroy forests for our facilities,
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 we have neither an Oxygen generator nor stable weather after that the climate alters;
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, the time of summer has a high degree climb, so the north and south ice melts, but the winter season declines.
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,
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 evidence injured other creatures.
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, like every matter,
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 question has solutions
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 as avoiding deforestation and growing a new planet. when we build apartments
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 of houses or build factories in small districts we do not have to destroy jangle.
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, we must grow a new tree on the roof of our flat . In conclusion, rising societies are happening;
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, we can do work that has less effect, and we must know these effects can destroy us.
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The introduction clearly states the issue and indicates the structure of the essay, which is crucial for coherence.
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The essay covers all parts of the task, discussing causes, effects, and solutions of deforestation.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay, reinforcing the overall argument.

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