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Government Investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Many people support the view that it is not worth the fund to expend on arts like music and theatre. Most of them believe the ministry should transfer
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 payment into public sectors, as an example of transportation, and education, while others, including me, consider it is crucial for the provincial development.
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 with, The state should cut some percentage of the art budget to devote to public services. The main reason why the government have to do
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 is that the public service on the side area of the notion
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 as suburb and village need development due to population increase. To show an example, many people in the village did not go to school because the road is so rough or the school is so expensive. Another example is the high percentage of dead people owing to the lack of hospital tools.
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, the ministry
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 to place public sectors in the
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, arts, including music and theatre are not a waste of fund, since people nowadays often to enjoy their life with the help of it. To illustrate, people sometimes go to
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heatre after their long stressful day or maybe attend some concert together with their friend. On the
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 hand, the state earned a lot of wealth from selling tickets in the countries. The authority collects taxes on the revenue earned in
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 allocation refunds to the budget.
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, spending fund on the arts raises revenues in the budget by attracting tourists and natives. In conclusion, the government should invest property equally on the art and the public services because both are essential for the development of the economy and the ability of the people to progress socially.
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, they should be financed at a similar priority by the union.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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