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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some that their total earning amount should be kept by them without paying the
tax
 money as the number is increasing day by day. I disagree with
this
 because the
tax
 paid by the general people helps the nation and the individuals of it.
Firstly
,
tax
 money is used for the betterment of the national organizations.
In other words
, people pay
tax
 money which is used for the maintenance of various governmental institutions
such
 as museums, art or sculpture galleries, libraries etc.
For example
, the artefacts of the national museum of a country are maintained and repaired with the cash of its citizens.
Furthermore
, the books of the national libraries are
also
 bought by the income of its people that help all to enrich their knowledge.
Secondly
, these are used not only for society but
also
 for the individuals. The governmental education institutions, hospitals etc. are aided with these earnings. The students who are living under the poverty line are not able to pay for their education, they are helped by the government with scholarships and many other facilities.
For instance
, the governmental hospitals treat the patients with the finance of its citizens.
Therefore
, it is the duty of all citizens to pay it and the duty of the authorities to use it efficiently in a proper way. To conclude,
although
 people should pay
tax
 from their income regularly, the amount should be of a minimal amount which will be spent only for the help of persons as well as the state.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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