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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The development of technology provides easier and cheaper access to reading materials. There is a popular opinion that someday
people
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 will stop paying for
books
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 and newspapers because they will get them on the Internet for free. But the future is here and
people
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 are still buying
books
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,
also
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 physical
books
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 are known for their
smell
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. These facts make me believe that we will continue to purchase offline
books
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.
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 with, we have been living for more than 2 decades with internet access and a whole new generation has been raised with electronics. In spite of
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, there are many young folks who still prefer physical
books
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. To illustrate, 79% of students choose to read printed fiction literature,
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 a recent survey by "ITMO" university on book preferences. Respondents say that it is
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 the feeling of leisure, they want to have rest from the screens that surround us everywhere.
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, youth-oriented stores
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 as "Marwin" (the most popular chain of stores in Kazakhstan) make around 20% of their revenue by selling
books
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.
Moreover
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, about 35% of space is devoted to paper materials
such
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 as
books
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, articles, anime etc. Correspondingly, the popularity of printed literature is timeless.
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, nothing can replace the wonderful
smell
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 of
books
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 and the magnificent joy of touching them.
For instance
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, the
smell
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 research by "Harvard" shows that the aroma of paper is most
people
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's
favorite
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. Particularly, contacting and feeling the
smell
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 of a book increases dopamine levels by 15%
along with
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 other hormones responsible for happiness,
whereas
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 zero growth occurs
while
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 reading e-
books
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.
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,
people
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 are way more likely to go for paper versions of
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 to fulfil their free time needs. In conclusion,
people
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 will continue to enjoy reading physical
books
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 and will be willing to pay for it
as well as
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 they still pay for other hobbies. Perhaps it will be one of the things that will keep us in the real world.

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Task Response
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Coherence
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Cohesion
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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