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Historical objects should be brought back to their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Artefacts of historical value that are taken or placed on foreign land have prompted some people to argue that these objects should be returned to its original land. In my opinion, keeping historical valuables will allow others to appreciate one’s history, but I am largely in agreement that it should be given back to its authentic owner as it reflects their ancestors’ journey. I will discuss my reasons
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 essay. Supporters of
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 issue can point that these objects of historical interest resonate a country’s past. As these items dated back several or hundreds of years, they are the witness of the forgotten era.
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bject of everyday living during wartime or progress.
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 would be an amiable action that can deeply strengthen two nations’ tie that for a peaceful relation between homelands.
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, the custodians of these items will better understand other land’s olden times while these are in their care . These objects can serve as an actual and tangible proof of history that can
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 stimulate people’s sense of appreciation and connection from other’s past.
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, it would be more beneficial for the country of origin to take care of their own objects as the rightful owner because it is theirs from the start. The original country will do better in honouring those pieces and will take pride
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 having them back. In conclusion, it is fully apparent to me that bringing back historical relics to its rightful owner should be done. Boosting one’s national pride by guarding their own possessions will take people to get to know their own ancestors and remember their mistakes and celebrate their victories.
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