Recent advances in air travel have focused only on those sitting in upper class and have left other passengers with no benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Air
Travel
is one of the fastest means of transport which is expensive too. In
this
transport
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there are upper
class
and lower
class
passengers. In the recent advances in air
travel
have focused only on
upper
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upper-class
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class
passengers and due to
this
other passengers have left with no benefits. As per my knowledge, I agreed on
this
statement. Air
Travel
is
f
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the
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astest means of transport and expensive too. Air
travel
has two classes of passengers, one is
upper
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upper-class
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class
passengers and
second
is lower
class
passengers. Nowadays to attract customers, Air
tarvel
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travel
are giving very good deals at reasonable rates but they are now lacking in providing the services especially to lower
class
passengers. As they have decreased the fare charges for lower
class
passengers to increase their passengers so they are providing them
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no benefits which
is
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acceptable. They are focussing only on
Upper
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Upper-class
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class
passenders
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passengers
as they are charging high fare from them.
For example
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Last
time when I was travelling through Airways
then
I have taken Lower
class
ticket and they provided me nothing during my
travel
. Nowadays Life is so busy, everyone wants to save time, so everyone like to opt for air
travel
to save time and money. But as fas as benefits are concerned, so lower
class
passengers are compromising on
this
. Air
travel
has no concerned with it that they should provide benefits like meals, vouchers etc. They are focussing only on the
upper
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upper-class
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class
passengers. Air
tarvel
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travel
is focussing only on making money. In
Conlcusion
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Conclusion
, Air
Travel
companies should
focuss
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focus
on giving benefits to all the passengers as they are charging from them too and should provide the services. Air
travel
compaines
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companies
goodwill/reputation depends upon the fare charges, benefits and services provided by them. They should not remain focused only on passengers sitting in
u
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pper
class
.
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