In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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certain place where all the people
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the world can live. Researching about the place where people can live is important but without any clue spending money would not be fruitful. The authority should rectify
first
whether there is any evidence to live in the other planets for taking the decision for spending money on that. In my opinion
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researcher can spend money if there is any possibility to utilize the place to live in the other
palnet
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limitations exist in
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case.
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, the researcher needs to know is it really important to research
this
topic. The certainty level needs to measure.
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the fund management regarding the research is important. The source and uses of fund
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to be particular.
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the implementation of the research is a vital topic in
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