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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Many people believe that the foods delivering via ships from one
country
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 to another, really affects the economics and the main food is not fresh produce because it's growing in a different environment. But I think, there are not any disadvantages of
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 trend.
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, people often tend to buy unavailable things, which are supplying through another
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 i.e. cereal or oatmeal, fruits like Washington apple maybe they are more influenced by the brands. In some other context, those fruits and vegetables are not that levels fresher, as they grew
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 climate
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 to keep the freshness alive they have to be bringing in preservative.
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, the can foods and out of seasonal foods always in demands from other countries Those are the things really affect the benefits from these products because those vitamins and minerals are not any more natural and far away from benefits.
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, Washington apples import in India but compare to price it is more expensive than the Indian produce of apple.
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 concerned about the economy. When the
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 doing import the things, they might be paying more than the usual cost with adding taxes.
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, currency variation, as US dollars is more expensive than Indian currency. When the things really rotate with in the
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 in the buying and selling process,
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 it could really bring the economy on a fast wheel.
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, the Indian farmers really hard hit by
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 conspicuous trend. Worth wise,
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 produce always fresh and grown in a natural environment and does not require any preservative to keep them fresh. In conclusion, people should be more focused on seasonal food and ignore the preservative one. In some extent, it is not going to give any advantages for health prospective and we could support our economy to bring more prosperity through their demand for things.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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