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Some people say that vertical City is best gear people live and work in tall buildings other say that original city is better be here there are two tall buildings and discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Few dwellers vocalise that vertical spread is upwards in which cities are growing up words, whereas that tradition spread is horizontal buildings in which cities grow outwards. I shall discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs. The major reason behind the importance of tall buildings is to accommodate A large number of people. Migration or settlement has increased in metropolises so there the there are a number of people over
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, no one suffers from the dearth of these facilities. Another reason is the learn about culture and tradition. In vertical City, different background and regions use to live together.
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 of vertical cities. One approach is, in horizontal buildings have a lower risk of natural catalogues
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 as thunderstorm and earthquakes. Another approach is people can live a better quality of life. Less competition leads to people to leave an enjoyable life as more natural light with good air conditioner. In conclusion,
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 everyone has dreamed of their own house with garden and garage yet In my opinion, population rise causes land scarcity, so vertical cities may become an option worth considering.
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