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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discussion both these views and give your own opinions.

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It is often debated that the only way to improve people's
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 is to open more gyms and
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 centres. Whereas many argue that the rise in sports facilities is not enough, there should are other factors that are needed to consider for public
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.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and will shed light into my opinion in the conclusion.
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 with, people believe to live a healthy and active life, it is important to be regular at gyms. It is an ideal way to be combat all the
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 diseases if they are actively working on the bodies.
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, many people believe that sports personalities are the most healthy people in the world as they actively working on their bodies and taking care of themselves. While
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 all of
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 is might be true but good
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 cannot be achieved solely been active in gym facilities. There are many other factors that contribute to players perfect
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 and
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 their diet. Diet plays an essential role in determining good mental and physical
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. Many countries are challenged with deflating
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 issues of their countrymen. Obesity rates in Arab countries are recorded at
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ll-time high.
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 is happening due to the high consumption of junk food in
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 region.
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 decade, Kuwait
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the highest obesity rate in the world.
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, people's lifestyle needs to be modified. Governments should organize
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 educational seminars for the general public. To conclude, I believe having huge numbers of
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 centres are not enough in determining public
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. A balanced diet with physical activities plays an important role in elevating public
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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