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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Success is the final point after reaching a goal. Nowadays material benefits and wealth had been being the main criteria for measuring prosperity in growth. Some people think that it possible measure advance in that way,
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 from my point of view, the key to being a success does not mean to acquire a lot of money . It means to be self-confidence and has a good relationship with the family. A family is an invaluable thing which a person can not buy or sell. Support from family is of paramount importance throughout the journey of life. The members of the family are people who share not only happiness
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 grift with the individual. It is helpful for the decrease amount of stress.
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, an entrepreneur faces the decline of business and the place where he/she can to overcome stress is in the circle of loved once. Today to be confident in a deal is an essential part of accomplishment.
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, self-confidence people more risky, dynamic and richer than persons who prefer the stable rhythm of activity.
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 caused that self-confidence people to do not afraid to lost something and enjoy of every moment.
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, the president of the USA in biography had been crisis before becoming part of the government. To sum up, I guess that money is not the basics of success because a person is successful only if he leads a happy and contented life. For
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, he should have a good family and confidence in yourself.
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